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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Thu Mar 06, 2014 8:38 pm

    OK - let's do a thorough reading of his powers . . . dotting eyes and crossing tees, and get this Alpha done. Can't wait for the Anubian Beta.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Thu Mar 06, 2014 11:05 pm

    OP wrote:INFECTED HOST
    Anubian Alphas do not begin the game on the battlefield. They must be placed on the battlefield using the Shapeshift special power.

    SHAPESHIFT
    After a common small or medium Wolf you control is destroyed by an opponent, you may place that Wolf on this army card. For this game the Wolf figure placed on this card is the Host for this Anubian Alpha. Place this Anubian Alpha on the space the Host figure previously occupied. This Anubian Alpha may use the Special Powers of the Host Wolf figure as if they were that unit.

    PACK ALPHA
    Instead of taking a turn with a full squad of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may activate, move, and attack with one Anubian Alpha as one member of that squad.

    Here are my suggestions for final editing . . .

    INFECTED HOST
    This Anubian Alpha does not start the game on the battlefield. It can only be placed on the battlefield using the Shapeshift special power.

    Since the Alpha is uncommon, I think we should talk about it in the singular on the card and it is in line with the Shapeshift power. Changed "begin" to "start" to mimic the Airborne Elite Card. Changed "must" to "can only" because you don't have to place it on the battlefield if you don't want to. "Must" kind of implies that you must.

    SHAPESHIFT
    When a Common small or medium Wolf you control is destroyed by an opponent, you may place that Wolf on this Army Card. The Wolf figure placed on this card is the Host for this Anubian Alpha. Place this Anubian Alpha on the space the Host figure previously occupied. This Anubian Alpha may use the special powers of the Host Wolf figure's Army Card. When this Anubian Alpha is destroyed the Host is also destroyed.

    Changed "After" to "When" to imply that it happens when a wolf is destroyed (after can mean later on in the game). Capitalized Common. Capitalized Army Card for consistency with most other powers. Removed "For this game" because I don't think it is needed. Changed the last sentence in the original because I think it reads better. Added the last sentence in my revision to prevent any questions.

    PACK ALPHA
    Instead of taking a turn with a full squad of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may activate, move, and attack with one Anubian Alpha as one member of that squad.

    No suggested changes from me.


    Let me know what you think.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Thu Mar 06, 2014 11:22 pm

    And a sneak peak at the card thus far:



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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Derek S on Thu Mar 06, 2014 11:43 pm

    Incredibly well done with the language. The card looks amazing- awesome job! I didn't notice any errors on the card and willing to put this awesome design and card in the finished category.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Lord Kai on Fri Mar 07, 2014 2:31 am

    The cards are looking awesome again!!!
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Lord Kai on Thu Mar 27, 2014 2:59 pm

    Sorry for coming late to the party ... but I was re-reading this, and I think the intent is that the Alpha can also use the Special Powers of the Squad when using PACK ALPHA. I am wondering if we'll get feedback that the "active, move, and attack .. " is too specific and that you can't "use special powers" when acting as a squad figure.

    PACK ALPHA
    Instead of taking a turn with a full squad of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may activate, move, and attack with one Anubian Alpha as one member of that squad.
    What do you guys think?
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Sat Mar 29, 2014 12:06 pm

    I'm not entirely sure what you mean. The Shapeshift power states that the Alpha gets to use the powers on the squad figure.

    Would this be better? It seems a little easier to understand the intent in my opinion.

    PACK ALPHA
    After revealing an Order Marker on the Army Card of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may include this Anubian Alpha as one member of that Squad instead of one of the Squad figures. Only one Anubian Alpha can be included as a member of a Wolf Squad each turn.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Derek S on Sat Mar 29, 2014 6:44 pm

    Would this be better? It seems a little easier to understand the intent in my opinion.

    PACK ALPHA
    After revealing an Order Marker on the Army Card of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may include this Anubian Alpha as one member of that Squad instead of one of the Squad figures. Only one Anubian Alpha can be included as a member of a Wolf Squad each turn.

    Maybe a little bit better. What happens if a common wolf hero is created. Per the Shapeshift power these guys could replace them as well.

    original version
    PACK ALPHA
    Instead of taking a turn with a full squad of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may activate, move, and attack with one Anubian Alpha as one member of that squad.

    How about

    PACK ALPHA
    When taking a turn with this Anubian Alpha's Host's Army card, this Anubian Alpha may replace 1 figure of that Army card and be activated through that army card. No more than one Anubian Alpha can be activated per turn when using Pack Alpha.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Thu Apr 17, 2014 9:03 pm

    I don't have a problem with these guys replacing a future common wolf hero if and when they are created.

    I like my rewording better, no offense intended.

    Damon wrote:PACK ALPHA
    After revealing an Order Marker on the Army Card of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may include this Anubian Alpha as one member of that Squad instead of one of the Squad figures. Only one Anubian Alpha can be included as a member of a Wolf Squad each turn.

    Derek wrote:PACK ALPHA
    When taking a turn with this Anubian Alpha's Host's Army card, this Anubian Alpha may replace 1 figure of that Army card and be activated through that army card. No more than one Anubian Alpha can be activated per turn when using Pack Alpha.

    Kai, any thoughts on us trying to address your concerns from 3 weeks ago? Please read back a few posts.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Lord Kai on Fri Apr 18, 2014 1:17 am

    Kai wrote:
    PACK ALPHA
    Instead of taking a turn with a full squad of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may activate, move, and attack with one Anubian Alpha as one member of that squad.

    Damon wrote:
    PACK ALPHA
    After revealing an Order Marker on the Army Card of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may include this Anubian Alpha as one member of that Squad instead of one of the Squad figures. Only one Anubian Alpha can be included as a member of a Wolf Squad each turn.


    Nomad, I like your wording. The "include/instead" is a nice touch that makes it simple to understand what we're going for.

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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Sat Apr 19, 2014 10:53 am



    Here is the redo of the Alpha's card reflecting the change in the wording of the Pack Alpha power. I also increased the size of the figure.

    Let me know if you see anything amiss. I would like to call this card done.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Derek S on Sun Apr 20, 2014 1:55 pm

    PACK ALPHA
    After revealing an Order Marker on the Army Card of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may include this Anubian Alpha as one member of that Squad instead of one of the Squad figures. Only one Anubian Alpha can be included as a member of a Wolf Squad each turn.

    PACK ALPHA
    After revealing an Order Marker on the Army Card of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may replace one member of that Squad with this Anubian Alpha. Only one Anubian Alpha can replace a member of a Wolf Squad per turn.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Lord Kai on Sun Apr 20, 2014 8:51 pm


    The word replace doesn't sound right. Worried that "replace" might be confusing with the Shapeshift power.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Mon Apr 21, 2014 8:30 pm

    I also prefer the "include" and "instead of" wording.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Lord Kai on Sun May 04, 2014 11:49 am

    First pass at Bio for Anubian Alpha:

    ==

    Anubian Alpha

    Years ago the arrival of the gigantic Werewolf Lords of Eberron brought a third race of wolves into Utgar’s ranks.  Adding to the contingent of Wolves of Badru and the Anubian Wolves, the mystical Werewolf Lords brought with them the taint of lycanthrope.  

    With the ability to spread the curse of lycanthrope through its fangs and claws, the Werewolves were greatly feared by the other generals.  Valiant warriors and even the most disciplined soldiers were overcome by the magical disease and turned upon their comrades with uncontrollable fury.  While the wizards and healers of Ullar and Jandar sought a cure for their fallen, the Werewolf Lords explored ways to enhance their own dark forces.

    As trials for dominance continued between the three wolf races, the Wolves of Badru quickly bowed to serve the Eberron Lords.  The Anubian Wolves however were not so easily swayed and battles between their pack leaders and Werewolf Lords were ferocious.  Many Anubians fell, grievously wounded and now infected with lycanthrope.  Some never recovered, while others underwent a horrific transformation into a new breed of hybrid wolf.  These hybrids were stronger, tougher, and more vicious than before.  They were in touch with the magic of the Werewolf Lords but also influenced by the lunar magic of Valhalla’s moons.  They quickly dominated their packs rising to the position of Alpha, but ultimately they were lieutenants to the Werewolf Lords.  

    The Anubian Alphas retained their battle fury but they also gained the ability to shapeshift into other wolves.  This included the Wolves of Badru but also the Varkaanan Wolves from Grut or into their previous Anubian Wolf forms.  And while they could not pass on the full power of lycanthrope to others, they could influence the minds of other wolves to follow their commands.  

    In battle, the Alphas use their shapeshifting powers to conceal their command role.  Once wounded in the fray, the Alphas unleash their rage and reveal their true form, often taking their attacker by surprise.  Their howls and psychic commands drive their pack to increased savagery and victory in the name of Utgar.


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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Sun May 04, 2014 12:09 pm

    Sounds great!
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Derek S on Mon May 05, 2014 7:32 am

    NIce.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Lord Kai on Mon May 05, 2014 5:57 pm

    Do you think that we need the "After revealing an order marker ... "

    PACK ALPHA
    After revealing an Order Marker on the Army Card of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may include this Anubian Alpha as one member of that Squad instead of one of the Squad figures. Only one Anubian Alpha can be included as a member of a Wolf Squad each turn.

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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Mon May 05, 2014 7:53 pm

    How would it read if it wasn't included?

    I like the way it currently reads.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Lord Kai on Tue May 06, 2014 12:19 am

    How about this?

    PACK ALPHA
    Instead of taking a turn with a full squad of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may include this Anubian Alpha as one member of that Squad instead of one of the Squad figures. Only one Anubian Alpha can be included as a member of a Wolf Squad each turn
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Tue May 06, 2014 7:33 pm

    Kai wrote:PACK ALPHA
    Instead of taking a turn with a full squad of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may include this Anubian Alpha as one member of that Squad instead of one of the Squad figures. Only one Anubian Alpha can be included as a member of a Wolf Squad each turn.

    Works for me. The only potential downfall is if there is a Kato type hero developed down the line who can take turns with various or multiple wolf squads . . . but I don't ever see that happening. I can change it, but Derek might see something that I don't, so I'll wait for him to chime in. OK?
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Derek S on Tue May 06, 2014 9:47 pm

    Either way is fine with me. Don't really see a problem with the new language other than what Damon mentioned.
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Lord Kai on Tue May 06, 2014 10:48 pm

    I think that the shorter language is cleaner, so Nomad, if you wouldn't mind making that edit - it would be great.

    PACK ALPHA
    Instead of taking a turn with a full squad of this Anubian Alpha's Host, you may include this Anubian Alpha as one member of that Squad instead of one of the Squad figures. Only one Anubian Alpha can be included as a member of a Wolf Squad each turn
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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Nomad on Wed May 07, 2014 8:32 pm

    How is this?

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    Re: W2 Anubian Alpha - released

    Post  Lord Kai on Wed May 07, 2014 8:35 pm

    Awesome, thank you!


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